Talk:Cheyenne Mountain High School/GA1: Difference between revisions

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Nominator: Tokeamour (talk · contribs) 19:10, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Bgsu98 (talk · contribs) 21:42, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Hello… I will do this review. Bgsu98 (Talk) 21:42, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

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   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

   C. It contains no original research:

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3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

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7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

User:Tokeamour: This article has several glaring issues. Done

• “History”, “mathematics”, and “science” should not be capitalized.
• “High school” is not a hyphenated term.
• “Alumni” should not be capitalized.
• “Red-Tailed Hawk” should not be capitalized.
• AP does not offer French Literature or German Literature.
• The alumni section is a mess. I strongly recommend restructuring this section into either a list format or a table format. Either one would be appropriate. Bgsu98 (Talk) 22:29, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Understood, the issues will be addressed immediately Tokeamour (talk) 22:38, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Bgsu98 Do you mind using the format “P” (paragraph) “S” (sentence) ? so for example PS1 would be first paragraph 1st sentence. Tokeamour (talk) 22:41, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Bgsu98 Errors fixed, please assess the format of the beginning of the list and I will continue formatting all of it, thanks. Tokeamour (talk) 23:00, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

That is better, but the names should be listed alphabetically by last name.In addition, if they are an Olympic or World Championship medalist, that can also be mentioned. For example:

Bgsu98 (Talk) 23:06, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Bgsu98 that was an issue already and there was a maintenance tag saying use surname Tokeamour (talk) 23:09, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

I understand and totally agree though. Tokeamour (talk) 23:10, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

I like the idea you have I will do that but for the alphabetical format it might be out of the conversation as I don’t have control over it. See maintenance tag in this link as it is not present as I have done what it requested https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Cheyenne_Mountain_High_School&oldid=1309958393, again I totally understand I’m just being bold. Tokeamour (talk) 23:14, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

YNothing in that maintenance tag says anything about how to alphabetize. The standard is to alphabetize persons by last name. Bgsu98 (Talk) 23:18, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Bgsu98 It does check source edit its invisible comment prior to my edits Tokeamour (talk) 23:25, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

You can ignore that invisible comment.Y Bgsu98 (Talk) 23:38, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Bgsu98 Understood, thanks for getting back! Tokeamour (talk) 23:43, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Bgsu98 Alphabetized list as required will do the same to pargraph Tokeamour (talk) 23:53, 20 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Bgsu98 Complete with additional request (Jeremy Abbott, 2014 Olympic bronze medalistParagraph still not done. Tokeamour (talk) 00:22, 21 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Y You will want to remove those skaters from the paragraph above the list. You will also want to reformat those other paragraphs into lists. Bgsu98 (Talk) 00:26, 21 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Bgsu98 Understood task will be done soon Tokeamour (talk) 00:31, 21 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Bgsu98 Please check my progress Tokeamour (talk) 01:03, 21 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Bgsu98 additional image inserted and will complete the next task when ready. Tokeamour (talk) 01:32, 21 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Bgsu98 Addressed a total of four citations requested from the other rater as I had it independently rated by a wikiproject by prior to nomination, this should make it easier for you to. Tokeamour (talk) 18:50, 21 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Bgsu98 User NeoGaze’s concerns have been addressed, who rated the article a day prior to nomination and your review. Tokeamour (talk) 19:13, 21 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

User:Tokeamour: I have numerous comments and concerns.

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highlighted parts re-assessed on Cheyenne Mountain High School, internet issues prevalent by thunder storm

• You say the school “specializes” in “courses such as English, history, mathematics, and science.” Literally every high school in the U.S. offers courses in English, history, mathematics, and science. Unless there is something unique about their offerings, this sounds like just another typical high school.
• Recommend removing “entire” from “the entire district”.
• Recommend wikilinking equestrian.
• “Alumni” should not be capitalized unless it is the first word in the sentence.
• Remove “a total of” from “a total of one Medal of Honor recipient”.
• The citation for Lindstrom belongs in the alumni section toward the end of the article, not in the lead. Only include citations in the lead if they are for statements that do not appear later in the text.
• Rewrite “United States Olympic God Medalists” as “U.S. Olympic gold medalists”.
• How is the “International Championship of Whatever” a “national” competition? International-national
• “The Cheyenne Mountain High School has participated…” unless they have stopped participating.

History (Development)Y

• Small numbers should be written out (ie. “one”, “three”, “nine”).
• “In 1876, the school had more families settling in the Colorado Territory, and District 12 constructed an additional 6 classrooms.” Recommend rewriting as “In 1876, as more families settled in the Colorado Territory, District 12 constructed an additional six classrooms.”
• Change “and brought” to “bringing”.
• Change “during 1889” to “in 1889”.
• Change “would go underway” to “began”.

“during which the trolley, still remained operations from downtown Colorado Springs, and later The Broadmoor, and the Broadmoor Golf Club, built by Spencer Penrose, and golf course architect Donald Ross, in 1918.” I literally have no idea what this is trying to say.}}

• Change “During 1945” to “In 1945”.
• Change “the students increased…” to “the student population increased…”
• “During 1945, the students increased to around 200 allowing for opportunities in nature which the teachers incorporated into their daily education for their students.” Holy whiplash, Batman. The phrase that comes to mind when I read this sentence was post hoc ergo propter hoc. The two halves of the sentence do not go together. Why would taking classes outdoors depend on an increased student population? Also, this sentence is unsourced.