== Evaluate the drafted changes ==
== Evaluate the drafted changes ==
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)
”’Peer review”’
”’Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:”’
”’Lead”’
”’Lead”’
The Lead is concise and good at briefly introducing what street vending in LA is, who is involved, what foods are involved, and specific cities where it’s most prevalent. The first sentence could be better at introducing the article’s topic because it just says it has a large history, but the entire introduction paragraph as a whole does a good job at that. The first sentence could be a little more specific though, maybe combining it with the subsequent paragraphs. The lead does a great job at giving a brief description of the sections in the article. The lead talks about some food items that are not mentioned later on in the article, like tamales (briefly mentioned) and fruit (not mentioned). The article would be stronger if there is a designated section that talks about specific food items that are popularly sold.
”’Guiding questions:”’
”’Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?”’
The Lead is good at briefly introducing what street vending in LA is, who is involved, what foods are involved, and specific cities where it’s most prevalent.
”’Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article’s topic?”’
The first sentence could be better at introducing the article’s topic because it just says it has a large history, but the entire introduction paragraph as a whole does a good job at that. The first sentence could be a little more specific though, maybe combining it with the subsequent paragraphs.
”’Does the Lead include a brief description of the article’s major sections?”’
The lead does a great job at giving a brief description of the sections in the article.
”’Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?”’
The lead talks about some food items that are not mentioned later on in the article, like tamales (briefly mentioned) and fruit (not mentioned). The article would be stronger if there is a designated section that talks about specific food items that are popularly sold.
”’Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?”’
”’Content”’
”’Content”’
The content added is relevant to food vending, but there are some parts that make me wonder the accuracy of the information/if food vendors are actually following these laws because there definitely are still food vendors selling hot dogs outside of Coliseum football games even though the article says they aren’t allowed to. I also feel like I see two vendors per block so I am unsure how up-to-date that content is.
”’Guiding questions:”’
”’Is the content added relevant to the topic?”’
”’Is the content added up-to-date?”’
”’Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?”’
”’Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia’s equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?”’
”’Tone and Balance”’
”’Tone and Balance”’
It looks like a lot of the edits made eliminated the subjective tone, and the overall content’s tone is neutral. There are no claims that appear heavily biased and are all backed up by articles. The article is not persuasive and neutral in telling facts.
”’Guiding questions:”’
”’Is the content added neutral?”’
”’Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?”’
”’Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?”’
”’Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?”’
”’Sources and References”’
”’Sources and References”’
There are some statements included in the article that don’t have a source attached to them.
”’Guiding questions:”’
”’Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?”’
”’Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You’ll need to refer to the sources to check this.)”’
”’Are the sources thorough – i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?”’
”’Are the sources current?”’
”’Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?”’
”’Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)”’
”’Check a few links. Do they work?”’
”’Organization”’
”’Guiding questions:”’
”’Is the content added well-written – i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?”’
”’Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?”’
”’Is the content added well-organized – i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?”’
”’Images and Media”’
”’Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media”’
”’Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?”’
”’Are images well-captioned?”’
”’Do all images adhere to Wikipedia’s copyright regulations?”’
”’Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?”’
”’For New Articles Only”’
”’If the draft you’re reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.”’
”’Does the article meet Wikipedia’s Notability requirements – i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?”’
”’How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?”’
”’Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles – i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?”’
”’Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?”’
”’Overall impressions”’
”’Guiding questions:”’
”’Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article – i.e. Is the article more complete?”’
”’What are the strengths of the content added?”’
”’How can the content added be improved?”’
”’Examples of good feedback”’
”’A good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.”’
”’Peer review of “Homemaking””’
”’Peer review of this article about a famous painting”’
”’Additional Resources”’
”’Check out the Editing Wikipedia PDF for general editing tips and suggestions.”’
;Whose work are you reviewing?
(provide username)
;Link to draft you’re reviewing:
;Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):
”’Overall”’
== Evaluate the drafted changes ==
Overall, the article is neutral and very detailed in telling facts regarding street vendors. The Lead tells me exactly what to expect from the following article. I like how the article goes into detail regarding other external factors that have affected food vending.
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)
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Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
For New Articles OnlyIf the draft you’re reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved. Additional ResourcesCheck out the Editing Wikipedia PDF for general editing tips and suggestions. |
- Whose work are you reviewing?
Duk30428
- Link to draft you’re reviewing
- Street vending in Los Angeles
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Street vending in Los Angeles
Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead
The Lead is concise and good at briefly introducing what street vending in LA is, who is involved, what foods are involved, and specific cities where it’s most prevalent. The first sentence could be better at introducing the article’s topic because it just says it has a large history, but the entire introduction paragraph as a whole does a good job at that. The first sentence could be a little more specific though, maybe combining it with the subsequent paragraphs. The lead does a great job at giving a brief description of the sections in the article. The lead talks about some food items that are not mentioned later on in the article, like tamales (briefly mentioned) and fruit (not mentioned). The article would be stronger if there is a designated section that talks about specific food items that are popularly sold.
Content
The content added is relevant to food vending, but there are some parts that make me wonder the accuracy of the information/if food vendors are actually following these laws because there definitely are still food vendors selling hot dogs outside of Coliseum football games even though the article says they aren’t allowed to. I also feel like I see two vendors per block so I am unsure how up-to-date that content is.
Tone and Balance
It looks like a lot of the edits made eliminated the subjective tone, and the overall content’s tone is neutral. There are no claims that appear heavily biased and are all backed up by articles. The article is not persuasive and neutral in telling facts.
Sources and References
There are some statements included in the article that don’t have a source attached to them.
Overall
Overall, the article is neutral and very detailed in telling facts regarding street vendors. The Lead tells me exactly what to expect from the following article. I like how the article goes into detail regarding other external factors that have affected food vending.
