Done Rewrite Reception section. – Comment – I rewrote the Critical response section from scratch, but used citations from before I rewrote this section. As of this comment, the popularity section mentions notable statistics and I cut trivial information about specific products out. I also included a table that SamuelLovesFilms expanded. Z. Patterson (talk) 10:53, 28 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Done “Born into a poor working-class household” – linking poverty is perhaps a WP:OVERLINK, I would remove it
Done “She is one of Izuku Midoriya’s closest friends” – it would be beneficial to explain who Midoriya is, for people unfamiliar with manga
Done “Her character has received praise for her development and personality” – replace ‘development’ with character arc
Done “Originally, he was going to create the character who would become” – would sound better as Originally, he intended to create the character who would become
Done “he remarked that his tendency to draw thick hips,” – hips overlink
Done “Ayane Sakura said she was happy to have received the role of Ochaco and that her desire to portray Ochaco was strong” – rephrase to Sakura was happy to have received the role of Ochaco and said her desire to portray Ochaco was strong
Done “Sakura stated that in the first season of the series, she thought Ochaco was a character with a strong core” – would cut down to Sakura thought Ochaco was a character with a strong core in the first season
Done ” Additionally, she said that from the first season, she regarded Ochaco as a hero instead of a heroine.” – would cut to She also regarded Ochaco as a hero instead of a heroine, particularly in the first season
Done “remember much because she could not see the script well” – script is another overlink
Done “Luci Christian stated that she had not read the manga, she was surprised to learn that Ochaco was strong” – an over-reliance on ‘stated’ comes across as clunky and can be better substituted for words like ‘said’, ‘affirmed’, or another synonyms
Done “such as in the speech she gave to plead for Izuku’s return in the sixth season, where she cannot be hampered by her voice.” – what does this mean?
Done “and it would resonate for so many people trying to figure things out when they are young.” – informal text
Done “She enters the aeroplane by being shot through a harpoon” – Change to She enters the aeroplane by being propelled by a harpoon?
Done “Ochaco understands Izuku Midoriya well,[20] was Izuku’s first friend,[2] is positive to Izuku, and trusts him.” – Condense into one sentence
Done I would recommend having the lead’s second sentence be an brief overview of My Hero Academia‘s basic premise. For instance, this part In My Hero Academia, where most characters have superpowers called quirks is useful information, but it is currently buried in the middle of the paragraph. I think that it would be a better idea to more clearly define the broader story before going into information about this specific character. This would be the most useful for readers like myself who know nothing about this topic. I would be very mindful of this throughout the article as a whole.
Done I am a bit confused by this sentence: Ochaco aspires to become a hero to support her parents as she protects and saves others’ lives. You say that she aspires to become a hero, but I would think that by protecting and saving other people, that she would already be considered a hero. Is there a reason that she would not already be considered a hero?
Partly done I would suggest removing the part on the “Deku” nickname. It has nothing to do with this character, and it reads more like a trivial detail to me. The lead should be used to do an overview of the article, so I would avoid details like this one.
Done I believe that this part, which allows her to nullify the effects of gravity and make any object weightless by touching it with the extended pads on her fingertips, could be condensed into something like the following which allows her to nullify the effects of gravity and make any object weightless by touching it or even further with something like which allows her to make any object weightless by touching it.
The lead does not really cover much from the “Concept and creation” section. The only information included from that part are the voice actors. Is there anything else that can be included for the lead?
Done This part has been offered sounds off, particularly the “offered” word choice. I think that something like has been made available or has been released would read better.
Done For File:Ochako Uraraka.png, I would include the name of the artist in the caption if it is known. See Black Widow (Natasha Romanova) and Iron Man as examples of this. I would also have the WP:ALT text for a bit more descriptive, such as describing what she is doing in the photo or her outfit. Again, the two articles linked in this comment could be used as examples for this
I would avoid just repeating the person’s name for the WP:ALT text without any additional information or context.
Done It is encouraged to keep non-free media usage to a minimal and only for instances in which it illustrates something that cannot be conveyed through the prose alone. What are the rationales for File:Ochaco Uraraka concept sketch.jpg and File:Ochaco Uraraka.jpg? Neither seem particularly necessary. There would need to be a stronger justification for their inclusion.
WorkingMy Hero Academia should be in italics for the citation titles per MOS:CONFORMTITLE.
What is a “student hero”?
Is there any further information on the character’s development? The current section seems quite short, even more so considering that a good deal of the first paragraph is on a different character (Yu Takeyama). This section also reads quite choppy as it jumps around a fair amount. For instance, the part on the English translation for the character’s name and Horikoshi’s art style and preferences come off as very random.
Currently, the character’s first appearance is only brought up in the infobox. I think that it would be useful to have when and where the character first appear in both the lead and in the “Concept and creation” section, as this context would be helpful to provide a frame of reference for readers who are unfamiliar with this character.
Yu Takeyama is linked, so I am guessing that she ended up being a character, so I would briefly clarify this if possible. The link is a bit confusing now, as the current wording makes it sound like this is a character who was rejected and never actually made.
What is meant by “suspicious” for Horikoshi’s art style?
Done I would avoid overlinking. An example of this is the Pretty link, which is just unnecessary.
Collaborate : Partly done After copyediting the article for parts that may seem confusing, submit for peer review so someone who is not in WP:A&M can review the article for readability.
Done “become Ochaco Uraraka as Yu Takeyama or Mt. Lady. Because Mt. Lady’s quirk allows her to change size, the author thought it would have made her too powerful.” first part does not make sense, second part assumes in-universe knowledge.
Done “In another interview, Sakura thought Ochaco was a character with a strong core in the first season” still not intelligible. Same goes for ” thought part of Ochaco’s core would not change”.
Done “Sakura said that as Ochaco grew, people could appeal to her handling more things.” this simply does not make sense.
Done Rewrite Reception section. – Comment – I rewrote the Critical response section from scratch, but used citations from before I rewrote this section. As of this comment, the popularity section mentions notable statistics and I cut trivial information about specific products out. I also included a table that SamuelLovesFilms expanded. Z. Patterson (talk) 10:53, 28 April 2025 (UTC)
Partly done I would suggest removing the part on the “Deku” nickname. It has nothing to do with this character, and it reads more like a trivial detail to me. The lead should be used to do an overview of the article, so I would avoid details like this one.
Working My Hero Academia should be in italics for the citation titles per MOS:CONFORMTITLE.
