User:Brodie246/United States home front during World War II/Harrison abbott Peer Review: Difference between revisions

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Brodie246

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User:Brodie246/United States home front during World War II
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United States home front during World War II

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Draft Changes:

I liked the paragraph you add and thought it had a substancial message needed in the article, here are a couple edits I would make

  • citations
    • I think you need more citations as well as more facts and information
    • you added one citation, but the link doesn’t work
    • more references to work cited would be beneficial
  • outline
    • your outline was rather broad, not much specific information on what sections of the article you want to change, especially because the article is so big
    • there are many sections within the article that could use some touch ups, but I don’t know what your focus is on the article
    • specify the sub-section of the articles you are changing, I had to find the section you were editing in the main article

Article changes;

I am unsure what sections of the article you plan to improve but after skimming through here are some sections that could use some improvement

  • Labor (Women)
    • This section is fairly well done but I believe could use some more facts and citations
    • might be hard to improve due to length and depth
  • Role of Women
    • this kind of goes with local activism but I think the activism of women on the homefront is under appreciated in this article
  • Propaganda and Culture
    • very short section for how important and common it was at the time
  • Local Activism
    • very short, could use more information and could potentially go hand in hand with women’s activism at the time

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