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Hi, {{u|Arconning}}, I’ll pick this one up. Hope to make a start tomorrow. Good luck. [[User:BlackJack|”’Jack”']] ([[User talk:BlackJack|talk]]) 19:50, 1 December 2025 (UTC)

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===Comments===

====Lead====

* Link first instance of [[cross-country skiing (sport)]].

* Extend opening sentence by adding his birthplace. That will put Eagle County into context for the second sentence.

* {{Green|During his college years, he earned multiple medals being part of the Western Colorado Mountaineers when they had won two titles on 1956 and 1957 in cross-country skiing.}} This needs to be revised. The “had” is superfluous, and “on 1956 and 1957” lacks sense and breaks the flow. Suggest rewording it as “During his college years, he earned multiple medals as part of the Western Colorado Mountaineers when they won two cross-country skiing titles in 1956 and 1957”.

* Link “army” to [[United States Army]], with branch if known.

* Can “competing for the United States” be linked to a US biathlon team? Or, was it a US Army team, which isn’t really clear?

* Link [[running]].

* Can “Masters World Championship” be linked to anything?

====Early life, education, and NCAA====

* No need for “Richard Norman “Dick” Mize” here. Just Mize is enough.

* Include Eagle County in the birthplace, for context as above.

* I’m confused by [[Copperhill, Tennessee]]. I see that Red Cliff is near [[Tennessee Pass]] in Colorado, so is there another Copperhill in Colorado?

* Link [[high school]], [[basketball]], and [[saxophone]].

* Link all of [[marching band]], [[football]], [[soccer]], and the first narrative mention of [[cross-country skiing]].

====Career====

* Change {{Green|After graduating, he had enlisted}} to “After graduating, Mize had enlisted”. A new section needs his name at an early stage.

* {{Green|He then participated at the 1959 North American Championships which was also a test event for the then-upcoming Winter Olympics in Squaw Valley and placed second with a time of 1:54:21.9}}. This needs to be revised. Try something like “He then participated at the 1959 North American Championships, which was also a test event for the upcoming Winter Olympics in Squaw Valley. He placed second with a time of 1:54:21.9”.

* By the way, I presume “he placed second” is okay in American English, because we would say “he was placed second” in GB? Ignore me if it is good AE.

* {{Green|He competed in his second world championships at the [[Biathlon World Championships 1959]] in [[Courmayeur]], Italy.}} is awkward with the repetition. Try “He competed in [[Biathlon World Championships 1959|his second world championships]] at [[Courmayeur]], Italy in 1959”.

* Link [[Tennessee Pass]].

====Later years====

* Link all of [[physical education]], [[biology]], [[skiing]], and [[cross-country running]].

* Why “even” an administrator?

====References sample====

You have twelve references, all online, so I’ll take four as a sample.

*”Ref 2”: Good.

*”Ref 4”: Good.

*”Ref 9”: Good. The source actually says he was Sp-4 rank, so I’d specify that in the article.

*”Ref S”: Good.

That’s about it for now. I’ll leave it with you, and then I’ll complete the review when you’ve had chance to consider all the comments. No rush. [[User:BlackJack|”’Jack”']] ([[User talk:BlackJack|talk]]) 16:53, 2 December 2025 (UTC)

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Nominator: Arconning (talk · contribs) 12:05, 17 June 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: BlackJack (talk · contribs) 19:50, 1 December 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, Arconning, I’ll pick this one up. Hope to make a start tomorrow. Good luck. Jack (talk) 19:50, 1 December 2025 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Link first instance of cross-country skiing (sport).
Extend opening sentence by adding his birthplace. That will put Eagle County into context for the second sentence.
During his college years, he earned multiple medals being part of the Western Colorado Mountaineers when they had won two titles on 1956 and 1957 in cross-country skiing. This needs to be revised. The “had” is superfluous, and “on 1956 and 1957” lacks sense and breaks the flow. Suggest rewording it as “During his college years, he earned multiple medals as part of the Western Colorado Mountaineers when they won two cross-country skiing titles in 1956 and 1957”.
Link “army” to United States Army, with branch if known.
Can “competing for the United States” be linked to a US biathlon team? Or, was it a US Army team, which isn’t really clear?
Link running.
Can “Masters World Championship” be linked to anything?

Early life, education, and NCAA

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Change After graduating, he had enlisted to “After graduating, Mize had enlisted”. A new section needs his name at an early stage.
He then participated at the 1959 North American Championships which was also a test event for the then-upcoming Winter Olympics in Squaw Valley and placed second with a time of 1:54:21.9. This needs to be revised. Try something like “He then participated at the 1959 North American Championships, which was also a test event for the upcoming Winter Olympics in Squaw Valley. He placed second with a time of 1:54:21.9”.
By the way, I presume “he placed second” is okay in American English, because we would say “he was placed second” in GB? Ignore me if it is good AE.
He competed in his second world championships at the Biathlon World Championships 1959 in Courmayeur, Italy. is awkward with the repetition. Try “He competed in his second world championships at Courmayeur, Italy in 1959″.
Link Tennessee Pass.

You have twelve references, all online, so I’ll take four as a sample.

Ref 2: Good.
Ref 4: Good.
Ref 9: Good. The source actually says he was Sp-4 rank, so I’d specify that in the article.
Ref S: Good.

That’s about it for now. I’ll leave it with you, and then I’ll complete the review when you’ve had chance to consider all the comments. No rush. Jack (talk) 16:53, 2 December 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Early life, education, and NCAA

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