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Nominator: Cathodography (talk · contribs) 01:26, 4 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Monkeysmashingkeyboards (talk · contribs) 03:23, 6 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Hey Cattos, It’s me again – thanks for your recommendations for reviewing GANs, it was very helpful.

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check.

   a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

   I’ve checked 15 sources per your recommendation, and they all support what the text states

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   It covers most of what I already know about this album, and what I can find

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• LEAD: The lead section doesn’t adequately summarize the article, almost entirely missing the Recording and production section.
  • “with Carey expanding the arrangements through the use of piano, accordion, synthesisers, and drum machines. “ – Nitpick: This doesn’t really convey anything to a casual reader, it’s basically saying “Carey used instruments to make this music.” Detail a bit more, e.g. preface in saying that Carey wanted to use “weird/unique” instruments, to signal to the reader that this is out of the ordinary – perhaps mention that Carey was trying to make sounds that wouldn’t be possible in a live performance.
  • “Musically, it is a math rock, experimental rock, and noise rock album with influences from post-punk, progressive rock, post-rock, avant-garde jazz, and other styles. “ – Nitpick: We don’t need to give this much detail in the lead, saying “it’s a math rock, experimental rock and noise rock album” without going into the additional influences would be much less cluttered. You could then add more detail on other parts of the composition, or expand the Recording/Production section.
• BACKGROUND: Mostly good, but needs some refining
  • “The name of the band itself is taken from the niche internet music style known as black MIDI, which involves creating dense compositions consisting a large number of MIDI notes.” – Nitpick: The reader doesn’t really need to know that much about the black MIDI genre; while I can compare the sound of this album(and especially Hellfire), it’s somewhat tangental.
  • “The school is better known for producing commercially oriented artists such as Adele, Amy Winehouse, and Jessie J.” – Nitpick: Also somewhat tangential – perhaps mention it while introducing the BRIT school?
  • “The band first gained attention through live performances in London, particularly during a residency at the Windmill in Brixton. The residency began after Greep contacted multiple venues, with the Windmill being the only one to respond. The venue’s booker, Tim Perry, became an early supporter of the group, providing opportunities to perform and refine material. Their reputation was further enhanced when the band Shame, also associated with the Windmill, described Black Midi as the “best band in London”.

    A video of their January 2018 performance for KEXP-FM in Reykjavík, Iceland was uploaded online and became a catalyst for broader attention, generating significant interest despite the band having released only a limited number of tracks at the time. The group subsequently signed to Rough Trade Records in January 2019. Their reputation was bolstered by a deliberate lack of online presence and limited press engagement, which led to the perception of the group as enigmatic.” – Nitpick: These paragraphs have multiple issues:

    • “…particularly during a residency at the Windmill in Brixton. The residency began after Greep…” – Nitpick: This could probably be merged into 1 sentence, e.g. “…particularly at the Windmill in Brixton, during a residency that began after Greep…” or something similar.
    • Nitpick: It says “Windmill” 3 times in the first paragraph, 2 times too many, especially due to the fact that this is the only venue being referred to.
    • Nitpick: These 2 paragraphs are both about BM gaining popularity – perhaps they can be merged, especially since paragraph 1 ends in a statement from a big band, and paragraph 2 begins with BM gaining popularity from a online video, a transition, such as “..in London”. After uploading their January 2018…Iceland online, the band received broader attention…”

• RECORDING AND PRODUCTION:
  • “Carey first saw the band perform during the opening night of their Windmill residency and expressed interest in recording them soon afterward.[2] The sessions took place at Carey’s Speedy Wunderground studio.” – Nitpick: I don’t know how to explain it; these 2 sentences together feels too fast – we go from Carey first seeing the band to Carey recording the music at his studio.
  • when I have time I’ll add more nitpicks