Talk:Yūichirō Miura/GA1: Difference between revisions

 

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I’ll review this. Thank you for doing more reviews than nominations and helping to cut the backlog. [[User:It is a wonderful world|IAWW]] ([[User talk:It is a wonderful world|talk]]) 15:04, 16 October 2025 (UTC)

I’ll review this. Thank you for doing more reviews than nominations and helping to cut the backlog. [[User:It is a wonderful world|IAWW]] ([[User talk:It is a wonderful world|talk]]) 15:04, 16 October 2025 (UTC)

{{u|It is a wonderful world}} I think I’ve hit all the current comments. Let me know when you have more comments I need to work. [[User:MisawaSakura|MisawaSakura]] ([[User talk:MisawaSakura|talk]]) 17:55, 19 October 2025 (UTC)

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Nominator: MisawaSakura (talk · contribs) 14:23, 13 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: It is a wonderful world (talk · contribs) 15:04, 16 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

I’ll review this. Thank you for doing more reviews than nominations and helping to cut the backlog. IAWW (talk) 15:04, 16 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

It is a wonderful world I think I’ve hit all the current comments. Let me know when you have more comments I need to work. MisawaSakura (talk) 17:55, 19 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

As a child, Miura was sickly and a poor student, dropping out of kindergarten and from the fourth to fifth grade of elementary school, he suffered from pleurisy due to tuberculosis and was hospitalized for long periods, meaning he missed nearly half of the year: I think this should be split up into two sentences. Generally if there is a lot of information in one long sentence separated with nothing but commas, the information is hard to parse. IAWW (talk) 16:09, 19 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Done

he had to change schools five times for elementary school -> “he had to change schools five times during his elementary education”: Much better wording IAWW (talk) 16:09, 19 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Yūichirō was exposed: MOS:SURNAME IAWW (talk) 16:09, 19 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Yūichirō was exposed to snow sports from the time he was a child, and placed in his first skiing competition during his second grade year in elementary school: WP:CINS error. “placed in his…” is not an independent sentence so there should be no comma before than “and”. IAWW (talk) 16:09, 19 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

done

his elementary school entrance exam: Do you mean his high school entrance exam? IAWW (talk) 16:09, 19 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

No, changed the sequence so it makes more sense.

individual championship at the Aomori Prefectural High School Ski Championships: Was this an all-around competition, or in downhill skiing again? Don’t worry about this if the source doesn’t say. IAWW (talk) 16:09, 19 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

It’s not totally clear in the source, probably all around

The Academy Film Archive preserved The Man Who Skied Down Everest in 2010: Overdetail as it is based on a primary source. Also, the source URL isn’t actually working anymore anyways. IAWW (talk) 15:04, 16 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

He is the representative director of the Miura Dolphins, a company that handles his work, media, and expeditions.[34] Miura is also representative director of Miura Yuichiro Office Company, chairman of the National Forest Recreation Association, chairman of the NPO Global Sports Alliance, former member of the Ministry of Transport’s Road Regulations Review Committee, and former member of the Prime Minister’s Office Youth Affairs Council.: I think these facts need a reliable secondary source to be considered notable enough for inclusion, otherwise they are simply promotion. IAWW (talk) 15:04, 16 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• I searched a long time for another source and can’t find one. Japanese wiki has this info but no ref. They probably got it from this spot too. Pls advise.

All three of Yūichirō’s children attended Rowmark Ski Academy in Salt Lake City.[36] Gota graduated from Rowland Hall in Salt Lake City.[38] Yuta and Gota both graduated from the University of Utah, also in Salt Lake City.: I think this is just overdetail, considering the article is about Miura, not his children. IAWW (talk) 15:04, 16 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

I contacted someone on wiki who possibly speaks Japanese for help with evaluating the reliability of the Japanese sources and for spot checking some. If they can help that would be amazing, otherwise I’ll have to rely on machine translation.

No issues for GA

The Huffington Post can be a sketchy source but there is consensus it is reliable outside of politics.

• Didn’t know that but since this is not politics I think it is ok

Yes, for sure, I should have been clearer about that.

I think usage of the Daily Mirror tabloid is fine in this uncontroversial article. Using a more reliable source would be ideal though. IAWW (talk) 15:04, 16 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• We can cut this if you want as there are three other sources

I think that would be best.

Done

Earwig finds no issues. Will check further on the spot check.

Nice Japanese sources. Can you read/speak the language?

• I can read it fairly well, but these days I have a lot of trouble speaking it because that part has gotten rusty.

Impressive!

Appropriately tagged

I see no issues

Consider adding archives to all references to prevent link rot. IAWW (talk) 15:04, 16 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• I don’t know how to add an archive unless it’s already in wayback machine.

I suggest getting the Wayback Machine browser extension. It is so useful, allowing you to click “save page now” to save it to the Wayback Machine, along with some other quick tools. IAWW (talk) 16:09, 19 October 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Where are the instructions to do that?