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<s>”Nagar was working at Ayalon Prison in Ramla in the early 1960s when Eichmann was held there during the trial for his role in the Holocaust” — I’d suggest moving this sentence to a little later in the section. In my mind the section would flow a little better if you were to begin by introducing Eichmann, then describe Ben-Gurion’s decision that the guards should not be Ashkenazi Jews, and then return to Nagar.</s> |
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*<s>”After Eichmann’s sentencing to death” — Suggest changing this to “After Eichmann was sentenced to death”</s> |
*<s>”After Eichmann’s sentencing to death” — Suggest changing this to “After Eichmann was sentenced to death”</s> |
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*<s>”the “hierarchical relationship” with Ashkenazi guards” — Perhaps clearer to say “the “hierarchical relationship” between Ashkenazi and non-Ashkenazi guards”?</s> |
*<s>”the “hierarchical relationship” with Ashkenazi guards” — Perhaps clearer to say “the “hierarchical relationship” between Ashkenazi and non-Ashkenazi guards”?</s> |
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Latest revision as of 06:53, 18 December 2025
Shalom Nagar (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)
As of 18 December 2025, 06:53 (UTC), this page is active and open for discussion. An FAC coordinator will be responsible for closing the nomination.
- Nominator(s): Jonathan Deamer (talk) 15:03, 16 December 2025 (UTC)
Shalom Nagar was a Yemeni-born Israeli prison guard who carried out the only judicial execution in the history of Israel, that of Nazi war criminal Adolf Eichmann in 1962. The article covers Nagar’s early life, his role in Eichmann’s imprisonment and execution, and his later years, including his involvement in Kiryat Arba and his presence at the Cave of the Patriarchs massacre.
The article has passed Good Article review, and benefited from the helpful feedback of peer review and FAC mentorship. Jonathan Deamer (talk) 15:03, 16 December 2025 (UTC)
- Per good practice at WP:APPNOTE, noting that I’ve dropped a {{subst:Please see}} template about this FAC on the talk pages of the users who carried out the GA/peer reviews. Jonathan Deamer (talk) 18:21, 16 December 2025 (UTC)
I believe the Hebrew terms should be wrapped in a {{lang}} template
- “After working in various security roles…” — The body of the article only mentions him working for the border police in between his IDF service and joining the prison service. Did he hold other roles?
- “He was chosen at random to carry out Eichmann’s execution” — The body seems to imply that this is a little dubious, and that he may not really have been chosen at random. Perhaps that uncertainty is worth acknowledging somewhow in the lead?
“and revealed only in 1992” -> “and was revealed only in 1992″Hebron could probably be linked in the lead“…what kind of Jews were these?” — Missing a full stop- I think it’d be useful to add some (approximate) dates to the end of the the “Early life” section if these are known (i.e. when did he complete his military service, when did he join the border police, when did he join the prison service)
“Nagar was working at Ayalon Prison in Ramla in the early 1960s when Eichmann was held there during the trial for his role in the Holocaust” — I’d suggest moving this sentence to a little later in the section. In my mind the section would flow a little better if you were to begin by introducing Eichmann, then describe Ben-Gurion’s decision that the guards should not be Ashkenazi Jews, and then return to Nagar.“After Eichmann’s sentencing to death” — Suggest changing this to “After Eichmann was sentenced to death”“the “hierarchical relationship” with Ashkenazi guards” — Perhaps clearer to say “the “hierarchical relationship” between Ashkenazi and non-Ashkenazi guards”?“so they returned to say he had been called in as the prison was short staffed” — Who is “they” referring to here?I believe Kol Yisrael should be italicised- (more to come)
